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Drunk
May 6, 2007 1:10:00 GMT -5
Post by Lulu Chaos on May 6, 2007 1:10:00 GMT -5
This poem was actually turned into a song that my band would sing at our shows. Drunk Been so misled by the things you've said. Say one thing, but do another. All I do is give, you take. Every promise you make, you break. Wish you'd open your eyes to see... The truth, the way the light. You don' t know how many times I've cried, about the times you've lied. I've asked the Lord to take down your pride. To let you see what your doing. You're so drunk, coming home late at night thinking every things alright. You tell me it'll be fine smile and walk away. Then why do you cry in your beer each day? You're so drunk... Is that all you'll ever be?
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Ilya
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[ss:Mana Blue]
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Drunk
May 7, 2007 20:21:04 GMT -5
Post by Ilya on May 7, 2007 20:21:04 GMT -5
Wow. That's really deep. I like it. Even though you used the wrong "your" three times. Great. Sorry, it's an Ilya thing. I always do that!My friend once wrote me this nice letter and it was really great but then I have to go and start correcting the grammar! But it is a really great poem, and I'm trying to imagine it as a song, though it's hard to imagine it without knowing the tune or anything XD.
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Drunk
May 7, 2007 21:09:00 GMT -5
Post by Lulu Chaos on May 7, 2007 21:09:00 GMT -5
Haha, yeah.. I never noticed the your's... I have SUPER bad grammer (Thank god for spell check and such) Yeah, If I had some way of showing you guys the way it is in song form I would.. it's pretty punk rock sounding though. I screamed a lot during signing it.. haha. good times.
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alliegirl
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Drunk
May 20, 2007 19:49:27 GMT -5
Post by alliegirl on May 20, 2007 19:49:27 GMT -5
Wow that's deep...I love it!
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Drunk
May 20, 2007 23:26:37 GMT -5
Post by .::.:Danni Girl:.::. on May 20, 2007 23:26:37 GMT -5
Deep, deep like the ever flowing river that runsin my soul... Deep like the never bottomless ravine of lies that runs through my head... Deep like the...the... DAMMIT! I lost it...
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Drunk
May 21, 2007 2:26:12 GMT -5
Post by Lulu Chaos on May 21, 2007 2:26:12 GMT -5
LOL... lies? I still think thats funny that those stupid boys would say that to you And thankies allie, I like it.. haa
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Drunk
May 27, 2007 1:18:58 GMT -5
Post by .::.:Danni Girl:.::. on May 27, 2007 1:18:58 GMT -5
I- Yeah... They make up a lot of things... Don't they?
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Drunk
Jun 1, 2007 15:22:16 GMT -5
Post by Lulu Chaos on Jun 1, 2007 15:22:16 GMT -5
they sure do.. it's because they know they suck in real life.
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Drunk
Jun 12, 2007 21:37:15 GMT -5
Post by .::.:Danni Girl:.::. on Jun 12, 2007 21:37:15 GMT -5
Yeah, anywhos, Lulu, I would like to use your poem for my poetry portfolio, we have to analyze a poem not studied in class, written by anyone, and I want to analyze this one! ^^
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Drunk
Jun 14, 2007 4:59:50 GMT -5
Post by Lulu Chaos on Jun 14, 2007 4:59:50 GMT -5
haha, well.. sure? If you really want to
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Drunk
Jun 30, 2007 12:38:38 GMT -5
Post by .::.:Danni Girl:.::. on Jun 30, 2007 12:38:38 GMT -5
I did it! I got 100% overall on my poetry portfolio... Thanks again Lulu!
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